Friday, 15 May 2015

FFF - Goodbye #flashfiction

Marion lay on her back in the bottom of the boat, its width giving her room to spread her arms to either side if she wished. She didn’t. She lay perfectly still, corpse still, as the slow current washed her past her home. The willows and cottonwoods were familiar friends, waving branches and leaves over her, waving goodbye.
She could hear birdsong as well, finches and wrens and robins each twittering away to one another in a musical language she sought to understand. She imagined them saying goodbye.
Her phone beeped, ruining the idyllic atmosphere. She knew what it said.


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6 comments:

  1. I was so feeling that gentile bob of the waters motion and could hear the twittering of birds. But where is she going? great flash

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  2. What did it say??!! You cannot leave us there, floating along, dozing to the idyllic lap of the current on the sides of the boat!! So mice flash! xo

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  3. Hey! You can't leave us hanging like this! What did her phone say? Love the way you put me in the scene. Felt like I was in the boat with her :-)

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  4. Damn you. You had to leave us hanging. It's really good.

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  5. I agree this is a great flash. What lead up to this and what is on the phone that she expects to be on it? So many questions. Awesome flash!

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  6. Beautifully written scene with disturbing news at the end. Has someone said good-bye? I love the sounds of the birds and their imagery you have written.

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